Histoire en anglais

Prostinocrate.

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01/10/11 à 16:52

Bonjour a tous, chers SEiens et SEiennes.
Il n'y a pas longtemps, j'ai du rédiger une courte histoire en anglais pour les cours
J'ai eu 17.5/20 , mais je me fous de ma prof (comme tout le monde quoi ), et c'est TON avis que je veut (et oui, je veut le, TON avis :p )
Donc voilà, et même si c'est pas très bien organisé pour les lignes et tout, ben c'est parce que j'ai fait du ctrl+c/ctrl+v sur Word

Bonne lecture, et au plaisir de lire TON commentaire ;)







THE SON OF THE DRAGON


This story took place in 1567 after J.-C.
The 27th of June Matt, Drew and Richard, three teenagers, were camping ten miles from their village for Matt’s birthday.
During the night, Drew went out for some fresh air. When suddenly, he heard a big noise, followed by a powerful jet of flame: it was a dragon!
Scared, Drew began to run but the dragon was too fast for him… And the dragon caught him with his claws.
Matt and Richard, awakened by the commotion, went out the tent to see what was going on.
There was a big fire! They fled, and once sheltered, taking their courage in both hands, they decided to look for Drew. Three hours elapsed but they didn’t find Drew's slightest trace.
So they returned to their village. On their way back they were attacked by wild hounds. They had to run away. Once they had shaken off the beasts, they didn’t recognize the place where they were…They continued a bit their way. Once they arrived at the edge of the wood, they saw a barren and hostile land. A lot of dragons were flying in the sky. Seeing a group of humans, they approached them. Then, a big black dragon rushed on them…
At the last moment, a huge red dragon appeared over the treetop and attacked the other dragon.
He couldn’t kill him, but he managed to make him fly away. They didn’t see the little silhouette on the dragon’s back. As soon as they landed, Matt and Richard recognized Drew!
Not understanding, they asked him what happened.
He said:
- Last night, I was captured by Achumd, this dragon. I was terrified so I fainted. When I revived, I was in a huge cavern.
- And what happened? They asked.
- I turned the head and I saw… a big head of dragon. I screamed. He didn’t do anything, so I calmed down. Then the dragon told me not to be afraid. I asked him why he captured me.
- And what did he say?
- I said “You’re my son”, declared the dragon.
- What? Matt and Richard exclaimed at the same time.
- Yes, it’s true. You know, I had no father.
- But…It’s impossible, it’s a dragon…
- That’s what you don’t know…it’s a Darunkar: he can change into a man when he wants.
At that time, Achumd transformed into magnificent boy.
- And why did he capture you and tell you that you were his son? asked Richard
The dragon answered with a mysterious voice:
- I need you for…

If you want to read the following, wait part 2

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01/10/2011 à 19:33

Mais...
J'en ai rien a f***** de truc de cours, de profs et de je sais quoi d'autre de scolaire...

Je veut VOTRE avis

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01/10/2011 à 23:02

Patapon a écrit :

Ou alors que ton texte ne plait pas?



+100000

c'est pas pour etre méchant, mais on s'en fou quoi ! c'est un truc que t'as fait pour les cours, bon ben voila.. c'est pas un chef d'oeuvre !
Et non ça va aller, je pense pas qu'une suite soit nécéssaire

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02/10/2011 à 21:47

C'est assez banal, enfin, je suis pas fan de ce genre d'histoire aussi. Si t'avais fait le même texte en rédaction de français, je t'aurais mis 6/20. Bonne continuation.

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05/10/2011 à 22:48

c'est un texte que tu as ecrit pour les cours quoi.

si tu veu faire un vrais bon texte, rentre dans les details. la c'est bacle comme travail pour un vrai texte, les explication sont pas assez longues, le vocabulaire est banal, certaine phrases sont bizarrement enoncer. faut chercher beaucoup plus profond que sa. la c'est superficiel.

Voila, Bon Courage pour la suite!

CosMic